Before you read this, you Must See this week’s picture it & write over on http://ermiliablog.wordpress.com/2013/03/03/picture-it-and-write-special/ if you don’t read it, nothing that follows will make much sense! Hope you enjoy!
Hope this finds you well You are? Oh,
Facebook recommends friend of a friend
On top five mutual acquaintance-
List of interesting strangers, stalking
Profiles and facts ex-lovers, gossip
About you, your life public, unsecure
On-line breached
I was once a friend Sometime ago
Of your brother Frankie dated her
He doesn’t seem to be daily stalked him
On Facebook after they broke up
Is he okay? Disappeared off-line
I haven’t seen him around Moved county
Tell him I said hi Not a word
And that me and you are now friends She’s mad
I.M. you later! Block – right now
Goodbye! Goodbye!
The story/poem was hard to follow at times. I felt myself darting from side to side, unsure if I should read left to right or up and down. I did both and found meaning from either direction. I really liked how you paired ‘on-line’ with ‘breached’, very powerful. Innovative idea! Thanks for contributing this week to Picture it & write!
- Ermisenda
I wasn’t sure I followed the parallel at the beginning, but an interesting way to present both sides, and I got the creepy two-faced stalker out of it. Good job.